Authors note: I am writing to get a 9 or higher in word choice and conclusion.
Eli's Original Story.
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It was a windy day when the man crossed the road and went into the bus station. As he was doing so he noticed something strange. A dark figure maybe 25 meters away seemed to be watching him. This man’s name is Dimitri. As he entered the bus station he heard the ticket vendor shout “next!” in a monotone voice. After he purchased his ticket he sat down on a bench and waited. Sitting next to him was a mysterious character. This man was wearing a gray sweatshirt and a black, seemingly heavy, vest. Then suddenly, out of the blue, the man grabbed Dimitri tucked him into a one handed cradle. Until he stood up he didn’t notice how massive the man was. Gunfire crackled behind him, he felt the heat of a bullet fly past him. Dimitri shouted “Who are you!?” at the top of his lungs, only to get the response of “No time to explain.” To be continued……..
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The hulking figure carried him to an abandon radio station to tell him whats was going down. He explained the oncoming threat. and how he was the only one who could stop it. Dmitri thought he was getting tricked and started looking for hidden cameras. He didn't know that this was 100% reality and not a joke. The man explained that the creatures wanted something we had. Also that the government wouldn't give it up. For that little reason the world would go into utmost chaos to either keep the mineral obtained. Or to steal it. Humans went into battle with them. Little did they know that they were heading into a war not even the world could handle.
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So we left off suddenly. So lets continue shall we. When you left we were talking about how Dimitri wasn't ready yet, so I trained him. After a lot of whining and giving up then coming back to finish he was actually ready. No doubt about my confidence in him. So we started a covert ops mission gave to me by my leader sort of as a "welcome to the club" sort of thing to Dimitri. On we went. When we got to the enemy headquarters Dimitri was in shock. Poor kid didn't know they were this sophisticated. Well believe it. So with me leading we slipped into the base undetected. The enemy was prepared. Although it could have killed me as well as many of the people who tried to complete this task before, but i knew what was coming. I saw holes in the floor, about 3 x 3 inches. Dimitri didn't. Luckily I grabbed his arm and pulled him out of the way just as he stepped on the spring to the trap. I'd say the sharpened stake was about a, maybe a quarter inch from his face. After the near death experience, He asked me what my name was. I responded with "Dimitri". He couldn't believe it. I knew he understood what i was trying to say. Yes as crazy as it seems, i am Dimitri Audoto. Just from the future. Now back to the story. Blah blah long walk blah blah sneak past infantry. Lets get to the good stuff. We were arming the bomb as "it" happened. Bombs went off, stun grenades were thrown, I could see, but he couldn't. I took action of sacrificing my life to save his. I picked him up over my shoulder. put him in the nearest alien looking vehicle. Then I. I grabbed something heavy and put it on the pedal of the vehicle he was in but his hand stopped me. A bleeding me asked me what i was doing. I said "well someone has to do something about these freaks". With a smirk i dropped the rock on the pedal. The vehicle skittered up dust as it went full speed out of the vehicle hangar. I went over to arm the bomb knowing i wouldn't have time to get out of the blast zone. Then, out of nowhere something savage filled me. I aimed at a freak's head and pulled the trigger till it almost broke i did the same to 3 others but then, the bomb went off. The future me died with the rest of them. I bet you never noticed this is the present me telling the story right? Well if you were following correctly what i was just telling you happened long ago. So technically I am the new improved future me. Freaky right? Well if you could catch my drift and comprehend what i'm saying you would know.
My alternate ending to Eli's version.
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It was a windy day when the man crossed the road and went into the bus station. As he was doing so he noticed something strange. A dark figure maybe 25 meters away seemed to be watching him. This man’s name is Dimitri. As he entered the bus station he heard the ticket vendor shout “next!” in a monotone voice. After he purchased his ticket he sat down on a bench and waited. Sitting next to him was a mysterious character. This man was wearing a gray sweatshirt and a black, seemingly heavy, vest. Then suddenly, out of the blue, the man grabbed Dimitri tucked him into a one handed cradle. Until he stood up he didn’t notice how massive the man was. Gunfire crackled behind him, he felt the heat of a bullet fly past him. Dimitri shouted “Who are you!?” at the top of his lungs, only to get the response of “No time to explain.” To be continued……..
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The hulking figure carried him to an abandon radio station to tell him whats was going down. He explained the oncoming threat. and how he was the only one who could stop it. Dmitri thought he was getting tricked and started looking for hidden cameras. He didn't know that this was 100% reality and not a joke. The man explained that the creatures wanted something we had. Also that the government wouldn't give it up. For that little reason the world would go into utmost chaos to either keep the mineral obtained. Or to steal it. Humans went into battle with them. Little did they know that they were heading into a war not even the world could handle.
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Although they didn’t stand a chance, Dimiti knew they could. The government didn’t bother to help because they knew that only one man could stop it. As the large man grabbed Dimitri again he took him to a portal. The large man shoved Dimitri into the portal and Dimitri disappeared. The large man jumped in with him and they ended up into a different world, that was in th future. Dimitri was amazed by how different it was. The large man explained what was going to happen. As he was explaining there was laser shots starting to go past from a large building. Dimitri knew what to do, he needed the large man to smuggle him into the building for his plan to come through. As the man flakily tied him up and put him in a wagon type trailer. As the large man got him into the building he got down to the basement and managed to sneak past the guards in the building and planted a bomb to destroy the building that was the cause to this war that was going to happen in the future. As the bomb was counting down he heard footsteps coming down the steps. He turned around very fast and as soon as he got to the full 180° he was shot in the heart and instantly died. By the time the man that shot him got to the bomb it had 0.2secondes so it still detonated and stopped the war that was going to happen. Although he died, he is still alive in present day.
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